Montgomery Burns
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Dyed Petya said:Montgomery Burns said:FA Watch represents football fans of all English Premier League clubs who are worried that the Football Association (FA) as an organisation are either unable or unwilling to police the laws of the game in a fair, objective and consistent manner.
FA Watch is committed to highlighting specific examples of such perceived bias where clubs and players do not appear to have been treated by the FA in a fair and objective manner. This will be generally in relation to disciplinary incidents, especially those concerning[1] violent conduct and goal celebrations, where referees and subsequently the FA’s own Regulatory Commission have dealt with incidents in a manner inconsistent with reasonable expectations[2].
FA watch enables to provide supporters, as a key stakeholder group, with the ability easily to monitor the FA's performance of its disciplinary function and to assist them in putting forward any observations they may have concerning the FA's conduct.[3]
Feel free to ignore any or all of the above - it's just the random musings of a tired bloke who'll be hitting the sack soon. Reasons for suggestions given below, the numbers equating to those in square brackets in the body of the text in the quoted paragraph immediately above:
1 - Lawyer's point, really, but that's what I am! Your original text binds yourself very specifically to certain incidents only. I suggest that you be slightly less definite just to give yourself extra "wiggle room". You never know when something else may come up that you might want to comemnt on or look at.
2 - In the original text, it read as though it would be the incidents themsleves that needed to be inconsistent, whereas in fact it's inconsistency in the way the FA deals with them that you're bothered by. My wording may not be the best way of saying it, but I think it would be better to phrase things so as to make that clear.
3 - I've suggested a new third para. I know that a mission statement needs to be short and punchy. However, it seems to me that the key aspects of what you're doing involve providing a service to interested fans which will let them: (a) see what's going on; and (b) help them to take it forward if they want to. I think that's worth making explicit in the mission statement.
This is meant to be constructive, not critical, and I hope the tone of this message doesn't suggest otherwise. Nor will it offend if you don't run with my suggestions (that's all they are, for you to take or leave). I do admire you for having the drive to take this forward, and like what you've produced so far. I wish you well!
Dyed,
Thanks a lot for taking the trouble - I've a few suggestions to look at and it's near the top of my 'to do' list. All this feedback is constructive so don't worry, i take it all in the spirit it is given and we'd never improve anything if we didn't ask others.
Cheers,
Monty